The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Nowadays, the number of people around the world has increased significantly, and some people think that phenomenon represents the biggest problem for our society. In
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I will explain some of the causes of
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trend and give my opinion about the statement. There are two main reasons related to the phenomenon. First of all, people do not think that
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a child is demanding.
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, in my country (Switzerland), a lot of young parents do not have any idea about the commitment that a child required, since they believe is like a game. Indeed, they do not realize that they must look after their kid for many years, maybe 20 or 25, as
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can lead their life by themselves.
Secondly
, in some nations, families need money to survive.
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a huge family
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means more possibilities to earn money and,
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, be able to buy the most important commodities, like food and water.
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, I believe that, at
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present, the greatest issue that
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humanity is dealing with it is
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climate change. Indeed, every day we can read or listen to a piece of news about
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serious and dreadful scenario.
For example
,
last
month, a read that in Australia there were many bushfires,
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in Europe there was a heatwave after a period with a lot of rain, which
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caused several floods in certain regions.
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, in numerous countries, it is no more possible
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the difference between seasons. In conclusion, I think that, nowadays, our society must cope with many harsh problems, and it is essential to give priorities
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since it is unimaginable
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a quick solution for all of them.
For
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reason, nations and communities should raise awareness of these matters. In brief, we need the help of everyone if we
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for a better life.
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