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The diagram below shows how coal is used to generate electricity

The diagram below shows how coal is used to generate electricity
This
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diagramm
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diagram
 illustrates the way in which coal
used
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is used
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 to get make
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electresity
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electricity
.
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, there are eight vital stages including the
process
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 of grinding the coal , burning, cooling,
manufactoring
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manufacturing
,
modifiying
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modifying
 and
delivery
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delivering
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 to electrical wiring. The time
that
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apply
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spent
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is spent
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for
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on
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 turning coal
to
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into
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electresity
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electricity
 is not short and is not an easy
procces
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process
furthermore
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 it requires eight long steps. The
process
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 of producing
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electresity
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electricity
by
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with
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 coal starts at the stage of grinding
of
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apply
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coal and
senting
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sending
 it  to the stove. After that crushed coal is cooled
witin
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within
 some period. After
time
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the time
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 is up,
these
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this
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 coal is sent to the
process
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 of reproducing through turbines. Before they arrive
to
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at
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 the
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electresity
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electricity
 wires, the big rebuilder is
waiting
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forwaiting
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 them in order to
modifiying
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modifying
 and
also
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 the
process
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 that requires a long time
for
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to
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ending
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the ending
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 is rebuilding. After all  the
process
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 is over, the coal is converted
in to
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electresity
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electricity
 and starts serving people.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electresity, process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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