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Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that Learning can be more effectively done when interacting
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Teacher
 ,
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other
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 think that online Learning is more beneficial. I believe that Learning and Studying in a
classroom
 with the
teacher
 will be more effective and beneficial. To commence with, Learning in
person
 with the
teacher
 in the
classroom
help
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 both
student
 and the tutor. To elaborate
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, Confidence and Ideas are boosts and it improves additional Skills.
Moreover
, Sitting
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with
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 of
Collegues
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colleagues
 help the
student
 to interact and find the solution easily.
For example
, One
student
 cannot solve all the sums without a
teacher
 and not having
person
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 interaction.
Thus
, a report stated that students learning in a
classroom
 have more
intelleuctual
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intellectual
 skills and good
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communication skills.
On the other hand
,
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 are so many modern
Technology
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are introduce
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 in the modern era which can help both
teacher
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 and a
Student
.
In other words
, people are getting more knowledge and information regarding their present studies and the future,
furthermore
, There are so many online
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tuition
 which are helping students to achieve their goals.
For Instance
,
In
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 the corona
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pandemic
 online classes had played a critical role whole over the world.
Hence
, students
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are
also
 aware of their
further
 studies with the help of youtube and Google. In Conclusion, Online studies have so many
number of
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positive Influences, I
belived
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believe
believed
 that
student
 growth is rapid when Learning in
person
 from a
teacher
 in the
classroom
 because It develops a
person
 to interact and
increase
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 confidence.
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