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Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

Nowadays,
interviews
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 are the most commonly used method for selecting new employees.
While
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interviews
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 can provide useful insights into a
candidate’s
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 personality and communication skills, I believe they are not always the most reliable method for choosing. In my opinion, a combination of practical assessments and trial periods is a more effective approach. Traditional job
interviews
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 allow employers to assess how a candidate presents themselves, their confidence, and how good they are in
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 with others. These are valuable traits, particularly in client-facing or leadership roles.
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,
interviews
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 often fail to measure the
candidate’s
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 actual job performance or technical abilities.
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, interview outcomes can be influenced by unconscious bias, nervousness, or even a
candidate’s
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 appearance, making the process potentially unfair or inaccurate. A more effective method of selecting employees involves assessing their real-world skills.
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, practical tests or work samples can give employers a clear picture of how the applicant handles the specific tasks required in the job.
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 approach reduces the risk of hiring someone who performs well in an interview but struggles with the actual responsibilities.
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, trial periods or probationary employment allow employers to observe a
candidate’s
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 performance, adaptability, and work ethic in a real work environment before making a long-term commitment. In conclusion,
while
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interviews
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 are a helpful part of the hiring process, they should not be the sole basis for making employment decisions. A more reliable approach combines
interviews
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 with job-related assessments and probation periods.

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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your points, especially in discussing practical assessments and trial periods.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that directly ties back to your thesis statement to improve logical flow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking devices (like 'firstly', 'in addition', 'for example', etc.) more to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and structure in your essay, which makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of comparison between interviews and other selection methods, showing a deeper understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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