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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The
two
 graphs illustrate an
island
, prior
and
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 after the building of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, it is clear there are considerable changes in
island
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the island
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 including, many houses ,
one
restaurant
, and
one
recpetion
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reception
was
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constructed.
Furthermore
,
one
 swimming pool, pier, and
two
 ships
was
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were
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 added. In
addtion
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addition
,
tress
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trees
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 and beach
unchanged
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were unchanged
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 and many
footpath
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footpaths
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 was introduced . Looking at
two
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the two
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maps
 in more detail, in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 and right of
maps
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the maps
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 several homes will
builded
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build
 and
also
 many
footpath
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footpaths
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 was added around
accommodations
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the accommodations
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.
In
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top
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the top
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 of
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of
maps
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the maps
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one
restaurant
, and
also
 under
restaurant
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the restaurant
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one
recpetion
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reception
 was added.
Furthermore
,
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 was surrounded by cars track.
In
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On
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top
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the top
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 of
maps
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the maps
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sea
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the sea
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surrunded
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surrounded
 the
island
 was still unchanged.
Regatding
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Regarding
 other changes,
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left
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the left
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 of
maps
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the maps
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one
 swimming pool near the beach was added. tress and beach
was
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apply
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still remain without
altered
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alteration
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.
In
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At
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bottom
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the bottom
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 of
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the maps
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map
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maps
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,maps
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 pire was
estabilshed
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established
 and
also
two
 ships will
added
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be added
add
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 to
island
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the island
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, island, one, restaurant, maps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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