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The maps below show the future plan about the Biology school in a particular university

The maps below show the future plan about the Biology school in a particular university
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The diagram
show
Change the verb form
shows
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 us some changes
of
Change preposition
in
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 the Biology School in a particular university in the future plan. It is
cleared
Replace the word
clear
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 that there are some new facilities and infrastructure
will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
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 be built in the second diagram. The second change is the lecture room and teaching building will be divided into two parts to have more classes.
Finally
Linking Words
, the IT centre will be expanded to have more space and facilities.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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