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Nowadays in many countries chemicals are used to produce and preserve food. Do the advantages of this use outweigh the disadvantages?

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The maps illustrate the
the
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upcoming overhaul
for
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 the Biology school in a certain university.
Overall
, it can be seen that most of the area
have
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 been deforested and with that, the plan introduces new buildings in the area. On the one hand, the contemporary
map
 has considerably more trees planted than the other planned
map
.
However
, the buildings in the present
map
 when compared to the future
map
, areas like the teaching building and the IT
centre
is
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 significantly smaller than the planned ones, in fact, it is twice as smaller.
Although
 buildings
such
 as the indoor sports hall and the central library
remains
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 the same structure
as well as
 location.
On the other hand
, the planned
map
 consists of new establishments
such
 as a brand new lab and office. The drama
centre
 has been renamed into the music
centre
 to avoid confusion. On the bottom left of the
map
, a spacious car park is added for
staffs
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 who work there. The teaching building and the lecture room
is
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 extended
with
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 another building
that is
 identical
with
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 the original. The IT
centre
 is moved down subtly but its size is enlarged to a degree.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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