Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument that
books
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provide more advantages for youngsters than what they receive from television and electrical devices
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as computers. In my standpoint, both types of entertainment are able to bring benefits to a certain level, but
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books
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should be a better priority for
children
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. On one hand, reading
books
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can help
children
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to enhance
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ability in reading and understanding certain languages. In fact, content in
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seems to be more compelling to them than literature texts studied at school and
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is an effective chance for them to expose
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new vocabulary which is useful in daily communication.
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, when
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are reading comics, the combination of both pictures and words
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a more realistic imagination for
children
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to apparently comprehend and memorize the meaning and practical application of certain words.
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, if parents convince their offspring to study new languages
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as English, reading
books
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could be one of the best decisions .
On the other hand
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, it is
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that exposure to television programs or computers can be an alternative to language education but in a more modernized orientation.
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, recently, there is an abundance of unclean
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that
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widely spread and advertised on the internet.
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,
youtubers
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YouTubers
or content creators
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bad words continually
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their videos on youtube which have been accessed by a
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of audiences, where the majority is the young generation. If parents do not take responsibility to prevent their
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children
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from approaching them, the influences of technology will be deleterious on their future
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. Taking everything into consideration, I reckon both ways of reading stories from
books
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or the use of technology seem to be beneficial to
children
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in different ways.
However
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, they should be oriented to entertain suitable resources on TV or computer games so that they could study and develop in the most appropriate way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Imagination
  • Visualization
  • Complex vocabulary
  • Sentence structure
  • Focus
  • Concentration
  • Passive activity
  • Interactive activity
  • Gratification
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Cultural perspective
  • Historical perspective
  • Attention span
  • Educational enrichment
  • Cognitive development
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