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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve gowing trafic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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One of the best ways to alleviate the problems of
traffic
 and
pollution
 is by increasing the price of gasoline.
Although
this
 essay agrees with the statement, other possible solutions worth to be considered.
To begin
 with, the government should elevate the cost of petrol to solve growing
traffic
 problems. As we know that the growing
number
 of private
vehicles
 on the road is uncontrollable. In Indonesia,
for example
, the motorcycle is the most popular
vehicle
 that we can see on the road so it becomes the main factor of
traffic
 congestion.
This
 popularity is because of the affordable price of gasoline for motorcycles. By cutting the gas subsidies for private
vehicles
, public
vehicle
 users will think twice to use their transportation and they may consider taking public
transport
because
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 more affordable price.
Thus
, it may be effective to increase the petrol cost so that the
traffic
 will decrease.
In addition
, there are two possible measures to solve the aforementioned issue.
Firstly
, changing
vehicle
fuels
 from non-renewable energy to renewable
fuels
. It is scientifically proven that the main contributing reason for air
pollution
 is petrol
fuels
 from
vehicles
. An electric
vehicle
 is a possible way to try; it is because
this
vehicle
 does not emit gas which is a source of problem
pollution
.
Secondly
, increasing the
number
 of public
transport
 is another way to solve
traffic
 issues. The reason why inhabitants prefer to use private
vehicles
 is because they cannot reach public
transport
. By adding the
number
 of public
vehicles
 and improving the system, I believe that people are willing to use public
transport
.
Overall
, to solve the issue of
traffic
 congestion is by increasing the cost of fuel and improving the
number
 of public transportation.
Moreover
, using renewable
fuels
 for
vehicles
 is worth way to consider to solve
pollution
 issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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