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Some people believe computer and mobile phone technology has changed the way we communicate positively while others feel it has had a negative impact on communication with others. discuss both views.

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Advancement in Technology has made a great impact and has restructured methods of communication around the world.
While
 some may feel
this
 has substituted traditional ways, some differ in the opinion that
this
 development may have an aftermath.
This
 essay will portray my view of the scenario and elaborate on why
this
 evolution only has a positive impact.
Firstly
, innovation has paved the way for most institutions to incorporate it with their progress, which allows for ease of data management. Apart from that, students are able to
retreive infromation
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receive information
 related to their studies from the Internet within seconds on these devices as compared to traditional ways.
This
 leads to saving time and expenses which can be utilized for other purposes.
Also
, communication has become convenient
due to
 the constant development of connecting gadgets. To cite an example, roughly 15 years ago, contacting people from one Country to another cost International Standard rates on phones as compared to only using Voice over IP medium these days.
On the other hand
, a few people think that
such
 equipment can cause distractions to others intervening with their duties. People have been seen spending a lot of time communicating with others for a long duration on these appliances, which were avoided a few years ago.
For instance
, students spend hours with these causing disturbances in their assignments. Nowadays, children have become more dependent on devices rather than on themselves or their parents, which will pose problems at times of hardship. In my view,
although
such
 hardware with access to the web can distract anyone from doing their work, proper usage brings about great changes to the world now.
Hence
, I would like to affirm that innovation leads to betterment in society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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