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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table gives information about how many
people
 come to visit Ashdown
Museum
 both times prior
and
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 after it was renovated. The pie charts illustrated the result of satisfaction of visitors who entered the updated version and the outdated version of Ashdown
Museum
.
Overall
, the number of
people
 who visited
were
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 increased
as well as
 the pleased results of visitors after the reconstructions. It was evident that after the reconstructed
museum
, there were over 20,000
people
 coming more than the preconstructed one. Prior to
refurnished
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 the
museum
, forth in ten
people
 stated that they were unhappy
of
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 the
visiting
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visit
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.
While
 only slightly over forth in ten visitors were happy about it. During the year of
new
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the new
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 version
museum
, there was
significant
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 increase
of
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in
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 satisfied and very much satisfied accounted for 40%, and 35% respectively. In comparison to the old one, approximately 30% of satisfaction grew.
Additionally
, the
amount
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number
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 of dissatisfied results of
new
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the new
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museum
were
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 dramatically drop to 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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