The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table gives information about how many
people
come to visit Ashdown Museum
both times prior and
after it was renovated. The pie charts illustrated the result of satisfaction of visitors who entered the updated version and the outdated version of Ashdown Change preposition
to and
Museum
.
Overall
, the number of people
who visited were
increased Correct subject-verb agreement
was
as well as
the pleased results of visitors after the reconstructions.
It was evident that after the reconstructed museum
, there were over 20,000 people
coming more than the preconstructed one. Prior to refurnished
the Wrong verb form
refurnishing
museum
, forth in ten people
stated that they were unhappy of
the Change preposition
with
visiting
. Replace the word
visit
While
only slightly over forth in ten visitors were happy about it.
During the year of new
version Correct article usage
the new
museum
, there was significant
increase Add an article
a significant
of
satisfied and very much satisfied accounted for 40%, and 35% respectively. In comparison to the old one, approximately 30% of satisfaction grew. Change preposition
in
Additionally
, the amount
of dissatisfied results of Change the quantifier
number
new
Correct article usage
the new
museum
were
dramatically drop to 15%.Change the verb form
was
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