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Towns and cities should be divided into zones so that all the schools are in one area, all the shopping malls are located together and all the industrial sites are situated close to each other. To what extent do you agree that urban areas should be split into distinct zones?

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 its effects impact on people. I will examine all of the perspectives before presenting my own opinion. On the one hand, shopping malls and industrial companies had been built in the middle of the city for profit purposes.
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, it has a negative impact on young brains. One of the primary benefits of dividing the
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 side from the entertainment and industrial area is increasing pupils’ attention at
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 because these kinds of structure's noise would hammer children's attention detrimentally.
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 research, carried out by the experts shown that a child's brain is more sensitive than an adult and their concentration can easily be disrupted by these kinds of distractors.
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, the fume which is released from the factories is poisoning children.
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, these constructions should be relocated from the
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 environment to different
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 in the city.
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 presents several drawbacks. A notable one is traffic congestion because an array of citizens take the road commute to work.
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 from workers. Unless the roads expand, it probably led to traffic jams. In conclusion, relocating factories and entertainment
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 should be divided into two parts.
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