The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from suagr can
The process diagram presents the transformation of how
sugar
is produced from sugar
cane.
Looking from the overall
perspective, the production procedures involved seven(7) stages, which begin with the growing of the plant and ended at the stage of drying and cooling.
Firstly
, the sugar
plant is grown for 12- 18 months then
, it will be matured to harvest in the second category, which is done in two ways either mechanically by a harvesting machine or can be harvested manually by hand picking. Thirdly
is the crushing level, whereby it's put into a crusher where the juice is extracted and collected into a container.
Furthermore
, the liquid is purified with the aid of a limestone filter. After purification, it is then
heated in the fifth category, in an evaporator, where the juice becomes syrup. The next step is
centrifugal which separates the sugar
crystals from the syrup, then
lastly
, the crystals are put into a large container where they will be allowed to dry and cool.Submitted by zikahill48 on
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