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The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an Australian family in 1991 and 2001.

The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an Australian family in 1991 and 2001.
The data provided in the form of a table compares how much money an Australian family spent on six main categories in two years (1991 and 2001).
Overall
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, expenditure on living in Australia increased over the next 10 years.
Although
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 people should spend less money
clothing
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 and transportation system other items have become more expensive. In 1991, people
shold
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should
 spend 155 dollars per month on buying groceries,
while
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 that increased by 5 dollars in 2001. Surprisingly, there was the same pattern in accommodation and each family considered $100 for
reting
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renting
 a house in 2001. The cost of bills and other miscellaneous items experienced a significant rise.
Expenditue
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Expenditure
 on electricity and water soar from 75 to 120 per month.
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, other goods and items
whih
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which
 make up a
sizeble
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sizeable
sizable
 amount of expenditure of Australian living stood at 270 after a 20 dollars growth. Totally, the cost of living in Australia grow up from 675 to 715 over the surveyed period.

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