The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
The chart below
show
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the number of magazines sold per
person
in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. The presented chart represents data about five countries that
were
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sold magazines
for
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per
person
and
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in 2003 and 2005 , with projected sales for 2007. We can see from the data all five countries
however
country
B shows more results than
other
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the other
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four
country
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countries
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.In
country
A is below
to
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apply
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2
person
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people
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.It is clear from the data that numbers are very
differend
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different
and in each specified year there are visible differences. If we compare
country
B and
country
A in 2005,and number shows that
country
A increased to 45
person
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people
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but it did not rise to
results
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the results
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of
country
B
that
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which
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is 48
person
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people
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.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
in 2003
country
A showed
best
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the best
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result.It could be noticed that compared with
others
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other countries
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country
C,D and E
there
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their
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indicators are low.
Country
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C starting from 2003 the number was between 30 and 40,
however
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,however
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it decreases gradually to 31. In
Country
D starting from 2003 had gradually
growth
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grew
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to 23 people in 2006. As can be seen in the chart in
country
E the
numder
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number
is very low even
it
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if it
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does not
increased
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increase
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ten
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by ten
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people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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