The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
The chart below
show
the number of magazines sold per Change the verb form
shows
person
in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
The presented chart represents data about five countries that were
sold magazines Unnecessary verb
apply
for
per Change preposition
apply
person
and
in 2003 and 2005 , with projected sales for 2007.
We can see from the data all five countries Correct word choice
apply
however
country
B shows more results than other
four Correct article usage
the other
country
.In Change to a plural noun
countries
country
A is below to
2 Change preposition
apply
person
.It is clear from the data that numbers are very Change to a plural noun
people
differend
and in each specified year there are visible differences.
If we compare Correct your spelling
different
country
B and country
A in 2005,and number shows that country
A increased to 45 person
but it did not rise to Change to a plural noun
people
results
of Correct article usage
the results
country
B that
is 48 Correct pronoun usage
which
person
.Fix the agreement mistake
people
Suprisingly
in 2003 Correct your spelling
Surprisingly
country
A showed best
result.It could be noticed that compared with Change the article
the best
others
Fix the agreement mistake
other countries
country
C,D and E there
indicators are low.Replace the word
their
Country
C starting from 2003 the number was between 30 and 40, Change preposition
In country
however
it decreases gradually to 31. In Add a comma
,however
Country
D starting from 2003 had gradually growth
to 23 people in 2006.
As can be seen in the chart in Replace the word
grew
country
E the numder
is very low even Correct your spelling
number
it
does not Correct word choice
if it
increased
Change the verb form
increase
ten
people.Change preposition
by ten
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