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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can be done to help the poor?

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Every country, no matter how affluent, has poor people. They can be described as those lacking in goods and services to the point where their lives become miserable. They may lack food and shelter and services
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 as health care and education.
This
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 article will examine the leading causes of
poverty
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 and suggest some possible solutions. The primary cause of
poverty
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 has always been
war
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. The recent
war
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 in Afghanistan saw people evicted from their homes, deprived of food and shelter, and services
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 as hospitals, schools, gas, water and electricity. Media coverage of the
war
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 caused worldwide revulsion. Some
countries
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,
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 as India and China, have problems of overpopulation and underdevelopment. They do not create enough wealth per capita for their people to escape from
poverty
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. Other
countries
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 are facing problems of unemployment and natural disasters. The solution to
war
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 may be a universal rejection that world leaders will not consider as an option and seek peaceful negotiation
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. Overpopulation can be addressed by adopting effective measures to reduce the birth rate and by developing resources. The possible solution to deal with natural disasters is to get massive aid from the rest of the world.
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, for
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 like China and India, the best solutions lie in the development of their national economy. In conclusion,
poverty
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 can be attributed to the frequent occurrences of
war
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, natural disasters, overpopulation, unemployment and underdevelopment. The possible solutions are peaceful negotiations, asking for aid from developed
countries
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, implementing birth control measures and improving the economy.
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