Art should be a compulsory class for high school students. To what extend do you agree or disagree? Give some reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own your knowledge or experience.

Most of
high
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the high
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school
currently gives a lecture to learn
a
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art
class
. I agree with
this
situation. I
belive
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that it is a good effect
to
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students
have
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having
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a
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art
class
.
Dispite
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Despite
of bad impacts, I think
art
lecture
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lectures
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should be provided to
students
.
To begin
with, having
a
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an
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art
class
might make
a bad results
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bad results
a bad result
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to
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for
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students
. Because it is really important to study other subjects in high
school
. Studying
art
class
could be a barrier to
study
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studying
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.
Also
, they would spend time
to draw
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drawing
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or making
somthing
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something
for
art
assignments.
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Moreover
, high
school
students
have to go to university. Every time is important to
highschool
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students
so it would be difficult
to
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them. Their high scores would be significantly necessary. If someone who
are
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not talented
to
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this
, they would get
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.
However
, there is a good part of learning
a
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art
class
in high
school
. It is a perfect chance to get a lecture in high
school
. Unless they have
the
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an
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art
class
in high
school
, they might not learn about
art
at all. And younger people can learn faster than adults. In high
school
, there are experts, so they can have time to learn from teachers who have professional skills. Some
students
who are interested
about
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this
will get jobs related to
this
,
such
as
art
teacher
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teachers
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,
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and artist
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artist
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artists
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. In conclusion,
art
class
is necessary to high
school
students
to give
a
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various experiences and find
the
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interests.
Although
it would be uncomfortable to study other subjects, it would be helpful to their future.
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