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Art should be a compulsory class for high school students. To what extend do you agree or disagree? Give some reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own your knowledge or experience.

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 currently gives a lecture to learn
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art
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class
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. I agree with
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 situation. I
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believe
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 that it is a good effect
to
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students
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have
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a
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art
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class
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Dispite
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 of bad impacts, I think
art
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lecture
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lectures
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 should be provided to
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.
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 with, having
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art
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 might make
a bad results
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to
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. Because it is really important to study other subjects in high
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. Studying
art
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class
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 could be a barrier to
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.
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, they would spend time
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 or making
somthing
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something
 for
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 assignments.
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Moreover
, high
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students
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 have to go to university. Every time is important to
highschool
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high school
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students
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 so it would be difficult
to
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 them. Their high scores would be significantly necessary. If someone who
are
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 not talented
to
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, they would get
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.
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, there is a good part of learning
a
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art
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class
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 in high
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. It is a perfect chance to get a lecture in high
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. Unless they have
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an
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art
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class
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 in high
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, they might not learn about
art
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 at all. And younger people can learn faster than adults. In high
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, there are experts, so they can have time to learn from teachers who have professional skills. Some
students
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 who are interested
about
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this
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 will get jobs related to
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,
such
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 as
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teacher
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teachers
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,
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and artist
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artist
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artists
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. In conclusion,
art
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class
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 is necessary to high
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students
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 to give
a
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various experiences and find
the
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their
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 interests.
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 it would be uncomfortable to study other subjects, it would be helpful to their future.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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