Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both individual teenager and silociety as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that the younger generation should be forced to do volunteering jobs in order to assist the local
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would be beneficial not only to individual
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to social groups.
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it seems to be advantageous, I think younger
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should not be made to do unpaid
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. On the one hand,
teenagers
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who have physical effort should be called to assist in
community
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work
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in their leisure time. Lest they should be stubborn, the local
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would be accountable for their behaviour and with the help of unsalaried
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, they might be able to control their social behaviour.
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,
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who participated in local
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work
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may care about their environment's cleanliness and be proactive in other
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's negative activities.
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, morally, children who throw away litter to the street can be punished and admonished by attentive
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who contribute to local free
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work
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. Thanks to forced
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work
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,
teenagers
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can encounter social problems and these help them to shape more sociable and responsible character.
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, young
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should not be obliged to do free
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activities,
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as sweeping roads, or painting trees. First and foremost, the requirement can affect
teenagers
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' minds negatively and destroy their self-confidence because these kinds of
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would be considered to be a low-degreed job by some
people
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. Second of all, moral obligations by society (especially free
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) can be counter-productive for
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. In their
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age, they should not tend to listen or take advice from older generations.
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, the
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should take moral steps to address them for local unpaid
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voluntarily in their free time. In conclusion, despite the advantages of
teenagers
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' help with free
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activities, some negatives should be included so as not to be counter-productive in obliged jobs without fees.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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