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The diagram below shows the changes of a village in 1995 and now.

The diagram below shows the changes of a village in 1995 and now.
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The provided map gives data relating to marked changes in a
village
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 in two various periods of time. (1995 and present) From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the number of accommodations increased and new 6 physical structures were added. It is noteworthy that the northeast tip and south part of the
village
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 changed significantly. Looking at the map meticulously, it can be seen that in the northeast tip of a
village
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 modernized with sports facilities, farmland, which is situated in the northeast tip of the
village
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 , replaced with golf and the forest park behind it cut down and there constructed a tennis. The housings in the west and north have enlarged in numbers, which depicted 4 new extra accommodations.
As well as
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 the buildings mentioned above, a fishing port is removed, which is placed south of a fish market.
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, the fish market was made into apartments,
while
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 the shop opposite the fish market was renovated as a restaurant. There was build new car park nearby the hotel in the east-south part of the
village
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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