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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

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The bar graph illustrates the
comparisan
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comparison
 between cell
phone
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 and home
phone
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user
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users
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 per one
hundered
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hundred
 people
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in amoung
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amoung
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among
few
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a few
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contries
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countries
.
Overall
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, Mobile
phone
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user
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users
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 are higher in
UK
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the UK
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, Sweden, Italy and
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Germany
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 as compared with other
countires
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countries
 Canada,
US
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the US
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 and Demark
whereas
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 found excess landline
users
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. To
begain
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begin
 with, Landline
users
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 are quite similar in most of the
contires
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countries
counties
, it is approximately 60
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user
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users
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 per 100,
however
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,
sharp
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a sharp
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 rose found in demark
that is
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 below 90 and
exact
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 on
oposite
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opposite
 side the landline
users
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 are very less in Ilaty.
In addition
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, Denmark is topping in
chart
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the chart
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 with
highest
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the highest
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landine
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landline
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user
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users
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 and lowest in Ilay amongst all the
contries
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countries
.
On the other hand
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, Denmark and UK have
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 higher cellular
phone
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user
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users
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 above 80 people, but
top
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the top
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 of the mobile
users
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 are in Sweden and Italy, around 90.
On
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the
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apply
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contrast, mobile
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user
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users
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 are
less
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fewer
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 in Germany, US and Canada which are around 70, 50 and 40 people per 100, respectively.
Furthermore
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, Ilaty has
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the higest
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higest
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highest
mobile
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number of mobile
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users
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 followed by Sweden, UK and Denmark.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, user, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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