In some countries, more a more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reason for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
The essay should describe why
people
rather hire a personal fitness trainer
than play sports
or do exercise
classes
.
Firstly
, finally
, more and more people
want to take care of their bodies. However
, they want more effective results in a short time
, they don´t have lots of free time
for their personal activities and rather take a personal fitness trainer
, who takes care only of their body and offers private training with includes for example
healthy diet what is also
a lot
important for their body and the last
feedbacks. You can Before starting the training agree with your trainer
about which results you want to get for example
after 3 or 6 months. Also
, you have more opinions with the personal trainer
than if you do only exercise
classes
and play sports
.
Secondly
, each side have
its positive and negative developments. Change the verb form
has
For example
, the personal trainer
can be more expensive for a lot
of people
so expensive than the exercise
classes
, however
, the trainer
should teach you how more effectively you can exercise
each part of your body, which is a big benefit for you. And next, you can lose a lot
of weight in a short time
and you can agree the personal training if you have free time
- with this
you save a lot
of time
than you have to attend sports
/exercise
classes
only at a specific time
. For some people
is so important to exercise
without other people
and have time
for yourself, but for some people
,it is better to meet with 10 -15 people
during the classes
.
In conclusion, it depends on what are your pluses and minuses and then
you can choose what you want. In the sports
world are a lot
of opinions about what you can do.Submitted by andrea.kroupova on
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task response
Your essay has addressed the topic, explaining why people hire personal fitness trainers instead of playing sports or doing exercise classes. However, it would be beneficial to expand your introduction. Start with a general statement about the increasing trend of people focusing on personal fitness and then introduce the specific topic about personal trainers.
coherence and cohesion
Though your essay is structured, adding clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph would improve coherence. For example, the first paragraph could start with: 'One reason people hire personal trainers is the desire for personalized and efficient results.'
task response
Also, make sure to expand on and support your ideas more comprehensively. Adding specific examples, such as how personal trainers tailor diet plans or specific success stories, would enrich your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each point is clearly linked to the next. Transition phrases and logical connectors can help guide the reader through your arguments. Consider using phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' or 'On the other hand,' to enhance flow between ideas.
task response
Your essay provides a good overview of the reasons people hire personal trainers and balances the discussion of positive and negative aspects.
coherence and cohesion
The second paragraph does well to compare both sides of the argument, which enriches the discussion.
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