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The given bar chart illustrates how many British persons donated to charity in ages throughout the period of 1990 until 2010.

The given bar chart illustrates how many British persons donated to charity in ages throughout the period of 1990 until 2010.
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The given bar chart illustrates how many British persons donated to charity in ages throughout the period
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 1990 until 2010.
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, what stands out from the chart is that over the duration,
people
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 from 36 to 50
years
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 old were up the list through 1990.
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 youth from 218 to 25
years
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 bottom of the list over the duration in question. In 1990, regarding the provided details, youths from 18 to 25
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 who donated to charities accounted bY around 17% of all ages.
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, the donation year witnessed a dramatic increase between 26- and 35-
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 individuals. after that, with the increasing of
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age
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 the donation rate was growing until it reached its peak from the old
age
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 of 36 to 50
years
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.
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 it returned to decrease Agan until 65
years
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 old
people
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 accounted by 33% of them are donating to the charities.
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, in 2010, young
people
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 from 18 to 25
years
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 old were lower than those of the same of their
age
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 in 1990 by one of ten.
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, when the older
people
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 from 26
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 35
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 old accounted for 24 donated persons in that period.
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 the individuals between the old
age
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 of 36 to 65
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 old experienced a gradual growth in 2010 until they reached 39% donated
person
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. after that, they saw a slight decrease in the donated
people
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 over 65
years
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 old by 35%.
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