Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional religious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people argue that humans no longer remember the original meaning of

festivals

and that most citizens treat them as opportunities to have fun.

While

I agree that enjoyment seems to be the priority during festival times, I do not agree that dwellers let their meaning fade away. On the one hand, religious and traditional feasts have certainly become pastimes for celebration. In many countries, Christmas is

concerned as

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a festival period for families to go shopping, give and receive presents and enjoy traditional meals.

Therefore

, most Christians look forward to Christmas as a holiday pastime, rather than a time to practise religion. Similar behaviour can be seen during non-religious

festivals

such

as Bonfire Night. Communities associated with

this

occasion with making fires, watching firework displays and perhaps going to large events in local parks.

In other words

, entertainment is people's primary goal.

On the other hand

, I disagree with the idea that the underlying meaning of

such

festivals

has been forgotten. In many nations, children learn in detail about religious reasons for celebrating Christmas, Easter and a variety of anniversaries in other religions.

For example

, in late December, kids sing the Holy Night song which has a religious content, and they may even perform nativity plays telling the story of Jesus's birth. Families

also

play a role in passing knowledge of religious

festivals

' deeper significance on the next generation. The same is true for

festivals

that have a historical background

such

as Bonfire Night or Halloween, in the sense that city-dwellers generally learn the stories behind these occasions at an early age. In conclusion,

although

people mainly want to enjoy themselves during holidays, I believe that they are still aware of the reasons for these celebrations.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Commercialization
Globalization
Cultural dilution
Traditional values
Secularization
Festivity
Heritage
Individualism vs. collectivism
Consumer culture
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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional religious festivals, during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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