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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

#friend #advice #college #job #idea
Dear Prakash, I received your letter yesterday regarding advice on future planning. I would like to suggest you go for the job rather than go back to studying. In my opinion, you have not gone to college in the
last
 two years and now going to college and getting used to it will be a big challenge for you.
Moreover
, right now career opportunities have
also
 increased for BSc (IT) students in the market and by doing that you can
also
 support your family as well. The day before yesterday when I was reading a newspaper, I saw many columns in an advertisement for the job title of web developer and software developer which requires a bachelor's qualification. From my point of ,view you can do the interview for the Web developer's position. I know there are many factors for you to consider
this
 won't be an easy decision. Whatever you decide, you can count on my support. Warm Regards,
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coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing need improvement to follow the conventions of formal letter writing. Ensure a more appropriate salutation and closing signature.
task response
The response addressed the question adequately but lacked depth and clarity in some areas. Try to provide more thorough reasoning and support for your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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