Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subject. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that some university
students
want to learn about other Use synonyms
subjects
Use synonyms
in addition
to their main Linking Words
subject
. Use synonyms
While
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,
others believe it is essential to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.
A commonly held belief is that Remove the comma
apply
students
Use synonyms
want
learn something else except their main Add the particle
want to
subjects
. Use synonyms
Majority
of universities give opportunities to relax with easier Correct article usage
The majority
subjects
Use synonyms
such
as art and physical education. Mixing easy and main Linking Words
subjects
Use synonyms
,
prevents Remove the comma
apply
students
from stress. Overstudying can affect Use synonyms
on
people in Change preposition
apply
bad
way, so Change the article
a bad
students
should learn other Use synonyms
subjects
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, learning something else expect general Linking Words
subjects
, will help to expand Use synonyms
horizons
and be Correct pronoun usage
my horizons
versatile
person. Add an article
a versatile
For instance
, if in main Linking Words
subjects
Use synonyms
they
do not have languages, adding Correct pronoun usage
apply
couple
Correct article usage
a couple
different
languages and learning them, makes you wise and sociable. Knowing more than 2 languagesChange preposition
of different
,
makes you not just Remove the comma
apply
polyglot
or Correct article usage
a polyglot
being
able to contact with variety of nations, it assists you Unnecessary verb
apply
to look
at Change preposition
in looking
situation
from different Add an article
the situation
a situation
angle
. Fix the agreement mistake
angles
Nevertheless
, studying many Linking Words
subjects
has disadvantages, Use synonyms
as
being exhausted and lack of time Correct quantifier usage
such as
to
personal life.
Change preposition
for
On the other hand
, some people claim that Linking Words
students
must focus on their main Use synonyms
subjects
. Use synonyms
In
some occasions , Change preposition
On
students
should learn what they need, and if they Use synonyms
want
learn something new, they always can take courses. Add the particle
want to
For example
, they may mention professions like medicine. Medicine Linking Words
students
Use synonyms
studies
for 7 years and they have busy Wrong verb form
have studied
schedule
Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
everyday
. If they will have minor Replace the word
every day
subjects
, they will have to stay at university for 8-9 hours, or Use synonyms
removing
other major Wrong verb form
remove
subjects
. Doctors must be qualified, and to be Use synonyms
master
of Fix the agreement mistake
masters
his
craft, they should study Correct pronoun usage
their
more
their main Correct quantifier usage
apply
subject
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, doctors better be tired from main Linking Words
subjects
rather than from unnecessary Use synonyms
subjects
. Use synonyms
Due
Linking Words
to
, doctors Correct pronoun usage
to this
saves
many lives and Change the verb form
save
health
Correct article usage
the health
oh
people on their hands.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account Correct your spelling
of
i
would agree with Change the capitalization
I
second
opinion. Change the article
the second
Students
must learn their main Use synonyms
subject
, to be qualified. Use synonyms
Besides
, if they want to learn Linking Words
other
Change the wording
another subject
other subjects
subject
, they can ask for directors to add new Use synonyms
Use synonyms
subject
or go to courses.Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
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