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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show the age distribution of the
population
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 in
Yemen
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 and Itay in the year 2000 and the prediction for 50
years
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 later.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
population
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group
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 for 15-69
years
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 old is the largest
proportion
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 in
Yemen
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 and Italy during the provided period. It is
also
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 noted that the number of people who are 0-14
years
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 old is predicted to have a smaller
group
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 in 2050 , which indicates both two countries will have an ageing
population
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.
According to
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 the data collected by 2020, around 62% of the total
population
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 accounted for the age between 15-69
years
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 old, and the second largest one was elderly, around one-fourth of the total, at 24%. Meanwhile, the least is the
group
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 of teenagers, at approximately 14%. Compare to
Yemen
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, most of the
population
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 were young individuals (0-14
years
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 old) and adults (15-69
years
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 old), with the largest
proportion
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 being roughly 50%, and the other one being about 46%. The
last
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 figure was the aged, at around 4%. In 2050, the elderly
population
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 in
Yemen
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 will rise considerably and become the largest
population
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,
whereas
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 teenagers will be declined to one-third of the total
population
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, at around 57％ and 37%, respectively. Comparing the data of Italy,
although
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 the adult
group
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 will be the largest
proportion
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, it will be dropped to around 46%,
while
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 the elderly
group
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 will be increased to 42%, a similar
proportion
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 to the adult
group
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. Both two countries will decline in the number of teenagers, which not exceed 12%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, years, group, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population demographics
  • projected
  • projections
  • notable changes
  • demographic changes
  • implications
  • birth rates
  • life expectancy
  • senior citizens
  • young population
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • aging population
  • socio-economic impact
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