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Not all drivers obey the laws while driving on roads. What are the reasons of this? What can be done to fix this problem?

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Despite knowing the importance of the
rules
 that the government sets for the community, it is easy to see that not all but only most
people
 obey them when they use their vehicles.
This
 essay will examine the main reasons for
this
 fact and possible solutions to overcome
this
 issue. The main causes of
this
problem
 are the unawareness among the drivers about why
laws
 are made and the soft
punishments
 that the government implements for breaking the law. When some
people
 do not understand why these
laws
 are made, they can’t find a reason to stop themselves from violating the law.
Also
, sometimes,
punishments
 for breaking certain
laws
 are not hard for drivers to pay.
For instance
, violating the law of surpassing the speed limit in a school area costs only 150 manats.
This
 penalty is not difficult for a person who has a job that pays 2000 manats for a month . Some possible solutions to deal with
this
problem
 are enlightening the importance of
laws
 and making more rigorous
punishments
 for
people
. Emphasizing the necessity of the
rules
 and explaining what can happen when we ignore them is a good way to solve
this
problem
.
Moreover
, if the government toughens up the
rules
 and makes
punishments
 harder for
people
 to pay,
this
 will give
people
 another reason for being more cautious and obeying the
laws
while
 driving.
To conclude
, human ignorance and
punishments
 that are not hard enough for
people
 to pay are the main reasons why not all
people
 obey the
rules
 when they drive. To solve the
problem
 actions like improving awareness among drivers, teaching potential results of violating the
laws
, and making
rules
 stricter can be taken.
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