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5.A.More people are traveling today than ever before. Why do you think this is? What are the benefits of traveling for travelers?

#people #travelers
In recent times, the
number
 of
people
 migrating from one
place
 to another is increasing rapidly.
This
 can be
due to
 various reasons, the main being for better
lifestyle
 and career opportunities. Undoubtedly,
people
 move from one
place
 to another for a
number
 of reasons. Some do it for a better
lifestyle
,
while
 some do it for better career opportunities. The
number
 of
people
 travelling is increasing rapidly. We observe
this
 trend mainly in developing countries.
For instance
, in ,Nepal the
number
 of
people
 leaving the country every day is around 1000. The students leave seeking better higher education
whereas
 the majority of
people
 leaving include labour workers. They generally go to middle eastern countries to find jobs so that they can support their families back home. There are various benefits of travelling. It benefits both the travellers as well the
place
 of travelling. Students will have opportunities to have a better
lifestyle
 and career when they complete their education. As more
people
 migrate to a
place
 it increases the available manpower of the
place
 which
as a result
 benefits the economy of the
place
. The earning that are sent back to the families will increase the incoming economy of the departed
place
.
However
, travelling has its own cons. More
people
 leaving will result in less available manpower in the former location as it will have very less working
people
. When more
people
 move to a
place
, it may cause problems
such
 as overcrowding or overuse of resources.
To conclude
,
people
 move from one
place
 to another for a better and more productive
lifestyle
.
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