113.Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific reseach, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
Some say that
information
about research should be shared with everyone, Use synonyms
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information
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data
can lead to better goods and consumers will be more confident.
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data
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between companies. Use synonyms
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is because by not giving some Linking Words
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as finance and the algorithm confidential might cost the organization a lot of money and take away its competitive advantage and Linking Words
this
might cause a reduction in their earnings and their reputation. Linking Words
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information
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competition
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However
, I believe pioneers always have more profit and are more successful than the followers.
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information
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people
more confident. Since they know about all the process and all the details of the product, normally, Use synonyms
people
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information
can lead to better Use synonyms
products
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people
working for the same aim. Individuals can help each other to get the final results think of possible solutions and improve the product. Use synonyms
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, there are many scientific researches that succeed because scientists share Linking Words
information
with others and work together to get the result they want. In my opinion, sharing Use synonyms
information
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products
for consumers.
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although
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people
do not share Use synonyms
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people
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information
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