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The chart below shows information was about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries

The chart below shows information was about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries
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The given chart illustrates the average percentage of 3 various
challenges
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 that people encounter when they immigrate in 3 different groups of ages. The initial impression is that
while
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 people who are between 18 and 34
years
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 old have the biggest proportion of finding accommodations and making friends
challenges
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 ,
immigrants
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 who are more than 55
years
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 old have the biggest contribution to learning the local language challenge As can be seen,
although
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 adults between 18 to 34
years
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 old contribute to the lowest percentage of learning the native tongue of immigrated country, which is 29%, they have the highest ratio of other issues among all age groups.
In contrast
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, the over 55
years
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 old group consists of 54% of people who face learning the local language problem and there are almost the same contribution of finding accommodations and striking up friendships issues in
this
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 group. Turning next to
immigrants
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 who are aged from 35 to 54
years
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 old , the table clearly shows that the proportion of
immigrants
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 who encounter learning the tongue of the new country and making friendships
challenges
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 is approximately 35% and finding somewhere to live problem is responsible for 39% of
challenges
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 among
this
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 group of
immigrants
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words challenges, years, immigrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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