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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the percentage of foreigners in a country who face three
challenges
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such
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 as making
friends
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, finding somewhere to live, and learning the local
language
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 in three age categories.
Overall
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, at younger ages,
people
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 have more
problems
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 with making a friend and fewer
problems
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 with learning a local
language
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 than other ages, aged
people
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 have reverse statistics. The group of
people
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 between 18-34 are weak to make
friends
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 when they immigrate to another country and %46 of them have
challenges
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 with
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 matter,
whereas
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 %40 face finding somewhere to live and just %29 have
problems
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 with learning the local
language
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. It is clearly seen,
people
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 between 35 and 54 have roughly as much as
challenges
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 in three fields but in older ages ( over 55), %54 of them cannot learn that
language
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.
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, they can find
friends
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 with ease and %23 have
problems
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 with making
friends
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.
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, only %22 encounter
challenges
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 in finding accommodation.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words challenges, friends, language, people, problems with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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