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Living at a place far from your native land will be difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#place #land
There is a
comman
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common
 fact that
continiue
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continuing
 to live
at
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 a different place from your native county could be challenging. I believe people should not change their living country for any reason because it will be difficult for them. Those who change their living places are bounded to feel homesick and struggle with different
culinaries
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culinary
. The vast majority of
individuals
 who move to other places from
homeland
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their homeland
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 experience the feeling of loneliness. Some of them describe
this
 emotion as
homesick
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homesickness
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,
therefore
, they will be exhausted in their routine lives.
These
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 group of people
eager
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is eager
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 to return back to their homelands for feeling better as soon as possible. Each year lots of university students,
for example
, move around the world to start a new pathway in their lives, and after a month they all feel homesick. Cultures and environments which are extraordinary to
individuals
 can affect their emotions.
Furthermore
, students want to visit their parents to feel better in the short term. Not only do
individuals
 who move to different
country
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countries
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 feel homesick but
also
 face
with
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unusual culinary cultures. Those may not be comfortable with the
diffent
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different
 types of meats, vegetables or cooking techniques.
For instance
, a vegan student who moves to the Middle East may
experiences
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experience
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 difficulties
for
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in
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 eating.
At
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there
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 lots of restaurants
ignore
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that ignore
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 special eating choices which are important for allergic
individuals
 and
the
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apply
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special group of consumers
such
 as vegans. In conclusion, living apart from your origin country and family may be hard. My point of view is
this
 fact is completely true because those people may experience homesickness and
dissatisfy
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dissatisfaction
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 with different eating habits.
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