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One of your friends is planning to visit your country and asking you for some information. Write a letter to him/her and say: o when the best time to visit your country is o suggest a plan for the travel o recommend places to visit in your country

#friends #visit #country #information #time #plan #travel #places
Dear Alicia, I am excited to know that you are planning to
visit
 my country. It's been a long
time
 since we
last
 met each other, but I have not forgotten all the wonderful memories that we enjoyed together during our college
time
. As you mentioned in your letter that you want to collect some information about your two-month
visit
 to my country, so it would be great if you could come here in the months of October and November because these two months are full of festival celebrations so your trip during
this
time
 of year would be entertaining and informative as well. I know you are even preparing a project on the Diverse Cultures in Asian Continent, so
this
visit
 would really help you a lot to get
the
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first-hand information about our cultures and traditions as festival times are the best times to show up one's heritage richness. It will be my honour to spend some
time
 with you, so I am inviting you to come to my place first. So you can enjoy Dusshera
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 and Chakaria festival with us.
Then
, we will
visit
 a few famous historical castles, and some modern-day buildings and shopping centres too. After that, you can
visit
 the Himalayan hills by visiting
Kullu-Manali-Shimla
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 to Dalhousie trip including various hilly stations.
Lastly
, I am planning for your trip to South India to explore the Bay of Bengal, and
finally
 return back to my home again to enjoy the biggest celebration of Diwali with us via Rajasthan. If
this
 itinerary sounds good to you,
then
 get back to me as soon as you can so that I can make all the arrangements before you reach there. I am happy to catch you again. Best wishes, Alicia Liberty.
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coherence cohesion
Consider dividing your letter into more concise paragraphs to enhance readability. Currently, some paragraphs combine multiple ideas, which can be separated for better clarity.
task achievement
Provide more explicit details about specific places in South India and Rajasthan. While the suggestions are good, more specifics can improve the completeness of the response.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is perfect for a letter to a friend.
complete response
You offered a comprehensive and detailed travel itinerary, which effectively addresses the task requirement.
greeting and closing
The letter opens and closes well, with a natural and structured greeting and closing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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