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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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The bar chart provides information about the
overall
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 number of hours of cellphone calls in the United Kingdom separated into three distinct sectors from 1995 to 2002. The unit is measured in billions.
Overall
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, the total number of
minutes
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 in each sector increased throughout the period.
In addition
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, the hours on local call was higher than their counterparts from the onset to the end . In 1995, the sum of
minutes
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 on local calls was approximately 72
billion
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 which was higher than the other sectors with just above 35
billion
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 and approximately 5
billion
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 in National and International and mobiles respectively.
This
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 figure increased gradually to about 85
billion
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 in 1967.
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, the figure plateaued to exactly 90
billion
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 both in 1998 and 1999 before started declining and reached its lowest level in 2002 by 60
billion
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. With regards to National and International calls, the total
minutes
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 recorded were just below 40
billion
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 and experienced gradual growth until they reached their peak of about 55
billion
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.
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, calls on mobile had the lowest total number of
minutes
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 by just 5
billion
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 in 1995. The figure increased until it reached its peak of about 35
billion
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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