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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problem as result. Why do many working People not get enough exceise? what can be done about this problem?

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In the modern world, folk have plenty of tasks and they can not ignore their duty,
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, they get some healthcare problems ,
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 as heart disease, obesity, high blood pressure,…..etc.
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, it is undeniable that lack of healthcare through lesser spare time for working out is one of the most challenging issues in the Middle East . First of all, nowadays, playing sports is less common everywhere in nature
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, some people do not have a break and some humans do not have enough money to spend on the gym.
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, a recent study by the WTO(U.K. government) showed that the death statistics of persons who do not have any physical activity are more than others who mostly spend their rest in the gym.
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 , it should not be forgotten that society who are keen on training regularly has a higher moral for life.
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 , I will tag some solutions for
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for the people who do not have rest time, the government can establish a gym in the place their effort with a jacuzzi, senna and bathroom, so they can practice and after that for coming fresh take a shower in the middle their works day,
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 group of people who work for self-employed can wake up earlier in the morning and do physical exercises .
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 , if they drive to industry at 10 am they can get up at 7 am and take a shower, eat breakfast and workout.
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, for employees who do not have a requirements budget , the state can establish some place where they can play sports.
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, exercise is necessary for our life, and no difference in where we live or which Personality we have, without it our body is in danger. So, as soon as possible we have to start it.
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