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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter • give details of your visit to the restaurant • explain the reason for the celebration • say what was good about the food and the service Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to you to express my gratitude for serving us a relentlessly delicious meal during our visit to your restaurant Pizza Nova, Collingwood, Ontario,
last
 weekend. My friends and I ordered an extra-large chicken pizza
along with
 some flavoured spicy wings for 20 people. Your staff provided us with very quick and delegated service. The reason for our visit was to throw a surprise party on one of our friend’s birthdays as she was quite upset and was not interested in the commemoration of her birthday because she failed to clear the IAS exam
last
 month.
Thus
, to cheer her and encourage her to try again, we decided to surprise her. We ordered pizza, wings, pasta, and some brownies. Everything seemed to be extremely fresh and very tasty. The presentation and gestures of the employees were
also
 welcoming.
Hence
, the surroundings and food made our friends feel happy, lucky, and motivated.
Therefore
, I would like to thank you for your great service by sending a $200 gift card for you. I hope to visit
this
 location again. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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task achievement
To further improve your letter, consider using more varied sentence structures to add sophistication to your writing. For instance, integrating complex and compound sentences can enhance the letter's fluency.
coherence cohesion
You can add a transitional phrase like 'In addition to the excellent service' at the beginning of the third paragraph for a smoother transition between your points about service and food quality.
task achievement
The letter clearly outlines the visit details, reason for celebration, and positive remarks about the food and service.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, reflecting a courteous tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy for the reader to follow and understand the content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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