The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The diagram illustrates the
process
by which milk
and other related products
are made.
Overall
, the process
involves six different steps cows grazing, milking, keeping the milk
in the freezing storage, delivering the milk
to the dairy factory, milk
pasteurization and packaging, and lastly
, shipping the final products
to markets and shops.
The process
of milk
production begins with the cow grazing on the farms. These cows will be milked out by a milking machine twice a day. The milk
then
will be stored in big refrigeration storage. From this
point, the milk
produced will be sent daily to the dairy factory by a milk
tanker. Once arrived in the dairy, the milk
will be processed either as a form of milk
or other products
such
as cheese, cream and butter. Before the fresh milk
is packaged, it will undergo a process
known as pasteurization to make it clean and clear from bacteria and viruses. Then
, after these products
are packaged nicely, they will be ready to be sold in markets and shops.Submitted by irarahmawati.polkesma on
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