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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger. Others say that economic growth is damaging the environment and should stop. Discuss bọth views and give your own opinion.

#people #growth #world #poverty #hunger #environment #bọth
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Some individuals say that economic
growth
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 is the only method to
end
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world
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poverty
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 and
hunger
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. Others say that economic
growth
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 is harming the ecosystem and should stop. In my opinion, economic
growth
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 is
only
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the only
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 way to
end
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of
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world
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poverty
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 and
hunger
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due to
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 it
create
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creates
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 job opportunities for
people
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 and
it
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apply
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make improvements in agriculture sectors. On the one hand, some believe that economic
growth
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have
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 a
negtaive
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negative
impacts
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impact
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 on
environment
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the environment
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.
This
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 is because economic
growth
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mean
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means
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increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 number of
factories
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, which these
factories
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 use fossil fuel.
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, more
burn
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out
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of
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 fossil fuel mean more Co 2 emission
release
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released
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 from
factories
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 to the atmosphere, which mean more Co2 footprint mean
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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a
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chance of global warming and climate.
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, more
factories
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 mean more air pollution, which
this
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have
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adverse
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an adverse
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 influence on
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people
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 health. To illustrate, air contamination can make
people
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 more vulnerable to get serious diseases namely, cancer, asthma, and high blood pressure.
On the other hand
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, I would like to agree with those
people
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 who believe economic
growth
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 only way to
end
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world
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poverty
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 and
hunger
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.
To begin
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 with, economic
growth
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mean
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means
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 more companies will enter
job
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the job
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 market of countries, which
mean
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means
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 more companies mean more job opportunities for
people
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.
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,
thousand
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thousands
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 of
people
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 will work
on
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in
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 companies as engineers, managers,
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and cashier
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cashier
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cashiers
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, which
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this
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can contribute to
improve
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improving
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living
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the living
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 standards of
people
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 and
reduce
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reducing
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poverty
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.
As a result
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, less
poverty
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mean
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means
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 less crime.
Moreover
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, economic
growth
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mean
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means
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 more improvements in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector, which
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this
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can
increase
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 of availability of food. To demonstrate, improvements in farming help
farmes
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farms
 to use
advance
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 methods
such
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,
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apply
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 genetic modification to plant
furits
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fruits
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vegtables
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vegetables
, which
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this
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apply
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make food
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growth
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grow
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 faster and resist diseases.
To sum up
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, from my perspective,
althouth econmoic
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although economic
growth
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 can a detrimental
conseqence
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consequence
consequences
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the ecosytem
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ecosytem
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ecosystem
ecosystems
such
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,
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 pollution, climate change , and global warming , I believe economic
growth
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 is the only way to
end
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world
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poverty
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 and
hunger
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 because it
create
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creates
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 jobs for
people
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, and
increase
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availability
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the availability
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 of food.
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