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It is suggested that everyone in the world should have a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages for society？

#world #car #tv #fridge #society？
Some people argue that the number of people of
has
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have
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 convenient
devices
 for life
such
 as cars, and Tv, and fridges should increase to 100%.I strongly believe that it will have a good
effect
 more than a bad
effect
 on society. If a number of people will be used to convenient
devices
 for life. Probably, they should spend a lot of
electricity
 and oil than now.We will make to pollution. Because
electricity
 making
need
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the need
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 to pollution.
That is
 likely to bad
effect
 on
environmentenvironment
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environment environment
.
However
, nowadays,
electricity
 making methods are significantly increasing with good
effect
 on
environment
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the environment
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. They do not
use
 oil, they
use
 natural resources
such
 as solar , wind and water energy.
That is
 no more make to pollution. And, the convenient device gives us for comfortable.
For example
, We are no more walking in the street because we have cars. The TV gives me free time for me.
That
is give
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 us to feel information,funny and several emotions just watching. the fridge protects me from food poison.
Then
 mentioned above that convenient
devices
are become
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become
have become
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very important in our lives. If, among them lost one item, we do not imagine my lives.Maybe, we will have any problems. Especially, about physically. in conclusion, Nowadays, we do not
use
devices
 that
use
electricity
 and oil is almost impossible.
However
, if, that will do not
use
 too much, that has much more advantages than disadvantages.
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