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[Dri]You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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From the beginning of ,humanity we want to know about each other, and we want to understand how they are feeling, how are their health, and what is going on in their community, even on the other side of the world.
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 is not new, but the way that we are receiving it is new. From my point of view, in general, the quantity of people having health issue is numerous, I am taking
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 point to explain why the media is focusing on problems and emergencies, the anxiety and deficit of time is part of the reason why people had received warns by social media platform with the direct subject of what is happening across the word related to problems and emergency, we do not have enough time to spend many hours in front of the TV to wait until the main
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 comes, because of that the report is so short and straight, to get those people informed.
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 harmful, it is direct
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 being provided to someone who is interested in that. But, we need to take care of how we are receiving reports, it is necessary to have the self-control to listen to
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 like on 11th September in the United States and not become a mad person. In my conclusion, equilibrium is the word to filter what is important to be attention to and what is not. We are in a race of life, and each second and minute is very important to be careful about what spend it. Be informed on what is happening across the world, but do not be crazy when you receive catastrophe
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