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nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. in what ways has technology affected the types of relationships between people?. has this become a negative or a positive development ?

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It is often confirmed that these days the way of interaction among individuals has completely changed, and
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 the progress in
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 on the kinds of relationships which are made between people to determine if it is a positive or negative effect, and I believe that it has many pros in different aspects of life. At the outset, in our era, a huge change has occurred
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 of the great development of communication
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, which makes the world one village.
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, a lot of social applications are available
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 as Facebook, Instagram, and WhatsApp, so; they enable humankind anywhere to recognize each other easily and maintain a strong relationship.
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 to that, when anybody makes contact with other people from different countries and cultures, some personal benefits will be achieved,
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; self-confidence improves, and communication skills become better.
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 a new type of commerce has emerged because of the evolution of communications between countries and individuals.
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, online trade enables many people to buy most of their needs through online shopping,
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; the international economy is boosted. On top of that, the ways of education have developed where anyone can join an international university to study online to get an international certificate without the need for travel. In conclusion, I believe that the great progress in communication
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 in the current decades exerts lots of positive consequences everywhere all over the world in various fields, so; all governments have to support
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 kind of
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 to maintain its evolution.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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