Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay their own tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
university
charges their
students
more than usual because there is no financial
support
from their
government
. Sometimes a short academic course would ruin parents’
budget
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. I strongly agree with asking the
government
to
support
student
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students
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and make higher
education
free and easier
in
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at
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any
level
.
Firstly
,
education
at any
level
from school up to the higher educational
level
in
university
should be free.
This
idea creates the same chance for all
students
to achieve themselves.
For instance
,
education
in
astronomy
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the astronomy
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department cost more than usual for
students
,
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apply
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and just prosperous
students
can participate and educate in these kinds of
specialty
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speciality
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.
Education
should be free at any
level
for all
students
with any financial background.
Secondly
, any
government
has a significant role to improve their
people
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people's
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knowledge.
This
just will happen when there is enough financial
support
from
government
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the government
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to the
students
and
university
to approve any learners or
students
with special talents. As an illustration, Supporting many
students
who are working on
robotic
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, not only
this
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support
help
students
to improve themselves, but
also
this
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has quite positive effects
for
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on
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their country.
Furthermore
, free
education
helps society to get improve at their
favorite
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favourite
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and the country will achieve at any point. Free
education
most
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must
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be a fundamental right for indigenous citizens and
government
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the government
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should consider a considerable budget for any
university
. In conclusion, free
educational
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at any
level
most
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must
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be
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is
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supported
from
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by
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any
government
, due
the
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fact that all
students
create their
countries
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country's
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future and a prosperous country needs higher
education
and with workers with high
level
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levels
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literate
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bear the cost
  • tuition fees
  • financial management
  • taxpayer burden
  • public finances
  • allocate resources
  • social inequality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • access to higher education
  • long-term economic benefits
  • educated workforce
  • earning potentials
  • investment vs expense
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