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some people believe that we have too many choices. to what extent so you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
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Whatever we do at present days, we have got lots of
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, starting from the transportation system to our daily living I do agree with the statement,
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 some say a poorer group of
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 have got fewer
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. To start with,
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 economic growth and developmental activities around the world, in terms of technologies, transportation services and of course system of government,
people
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 have got more alternatives in their life.
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, transport services; if you want to go to other districts or states, you were provided with multiple
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 to travel via train or buses and for the wealthier individuals, they are offered with air busses.
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 within the same transport system, say bus, there are multiple types of buses, with their affordability they can either travel in an air-conditioned bus or a normal bus. Presence of all these facilities, can’t we say we don’t have
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?
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, it is arguable that for some they will have no
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 in their lives, especially those poorer section of society. Forget about any other
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, they don’t even have a house to spend their nights in. For ,example
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 living on the streets are suffering day and night struggling to get a meal of the day.
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 these
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 have got fewer
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 certain groups of
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 in society like nongovernmental organizations help those groups and bring them up by providing certain jobs.
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 is another option offered by the society. To end my essay, I would say that there are always better sides and worst scenarios as I have mentioned above.
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 are always there for all including economically deprived sections of the streets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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