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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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In many
countries
,
people
 will select to go on
holiday
 in their own
countries
 and they do not choose to go to other
countries
. It seems to me that
traveling
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travelling
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 in your homeland is better than in other territories, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, financial problems have caused the majority of
people
 could not go abroad on
holiday
. Because, annual inflation in the world leads to becoming more poor
people
, and buying things even transport are hard and too expensive for them, they have low income than a progression of communities in the year.
For example
, booking a hotel, getting a tour, and buying a ticket
have
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 been too expensive. A second necessary factor for entering another state is getting a visa. Since you have to prepare a lot of documents
such
 as financial files and work experience, and
also
 having a house. It is true that there are a few numbers of going abroad on
holiday
, one of them you have no amusement park, lake, sea, historical places, and so on.
Therefore
people
 have to go to other
countries
 for visiting. Despite
this
, it seems that many
people
 like to support tourist destinations in our country or they are a question of finance.
To conclude
, there are humans
which
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who
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 in more
countries
 have poorly paid and have to work overtime to make ends meet.
Likewise
, they do have not a lot of money in their account or they do have not a home for themselves, and they do have not enough time for going on
holiday
 abroad,
thus
 they have to go on
holiday
 for a week.
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