Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. Do you agree not? this statement or not?

It is
common
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belief that the best way to have a
house
is rather than hire it.
However
, I firmly believe that buying a
house
is the best method. From my
perspectively
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, I agree with
this
view and
this
essay will address the reasons for my view. In
today
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society, owning a home where they do not worry about renting.
People
own
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their houses
that
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will not
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with
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their
money
and less
money
in
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making profit. When you do not have much
money
, you can buy a small
house
instead
of renting and it will cost a lot more
money
. If the rent accumulates gradually, you can buy a
house
. The renters an example, not only is it more difficult to buy a
house
in the future, but
also
to pay more rent.
As a result
, hiring a
house
is not the best choice to live
.
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In addition
,
people
have in-
house
possession that could live with peace of mind.
People
can not follow any rules and can live with discretion.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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among
house’s
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the house’s
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possessions not only
approriated
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appropriated
and undisturbed
,
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but
also
helps them have a
house
after married.
For instance
, when
people
get married, they need to possess their
house
because the tenants will be extremely detrimental to the education and growth of children.
Therefore
, owning a home gives a sense of
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satisfaction and it
true
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that buying a home has more obvious advantages. In conclusion, I believe that
people
are
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the owner of
house
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a house
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is the best
instead
of
live
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in
house
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a house
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temporarily.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • property ladder
  • mortgage
  • rental agreement
  • down payment
  • equity
  • appreciate
  • rental market
  • monthly installments
  • credit score
  • repairs and maintenance
  • landlord
  • tenant
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