the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040

the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in 4 asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The given line graph illustrates data on the percentage of the
population
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in the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand and Indonesia for half of a century
in addition
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to THE predicted
number
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for the next 2 decades.
Overall
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, the trend of rising
population
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in
Malaysia
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and Indonesia witnessed a considerable increase
while
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2 other countries increased gradually during past decades,
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the soaring trend of citizens living in
cities
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seems to keep the identical path.
To begin
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with, in 1970 the
Philippines
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started recording over 30% of its citizens living in
cities
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in the same
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only about 12% of Indonesians were located in urban areas.
However
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, these two countries statics started to increase and by 2020, over 70% and 50% of the
population
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of respectively
Philippines
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and Indonesia were living in
cities
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. It is anticipated that these two countries reach the
number
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of nearly 80% and 60% by 2040.
On the other hand
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, at the starting point
Malaysia
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with 30% of its people living in urban areas and Thailand with nearly 20% of its total
population
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started a fluctuating process. By 1990,
Malaysia
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witnessed a considerable increase reaching 50%
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this
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number
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fell to nearly 45% in 2010
then
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it soared up again and it can be expected to reach a
number
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around 60%. Following that, about 20% of Thailand’s
population
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were living in towns and
cities
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in 1979, after 40 years
this
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trend raised and reached a mutual point with the
Philippines
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recording about 45% of citizens and
finally
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, it is predicted to reach a
number
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of approximately 50% of its
population
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living in
cities
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by 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, number, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • rural-urban migration
  • economic development
  • industrialization
  • infrastructure strain
  • environmental impacts
  • social challenges
  • urban planning
  • government policies
  • housing policies
  • public services
  • trend analysis
  • prediction
  • initiatives
  • urban growth management
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