Technology has more positive than negative effects on our relationships with other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it has become
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widespread knowledge that technology
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improved
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relationship
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to the past. I firmly agree with the given idea and some
arguement
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argument
arguments
surround my notion.
to begin
with,
as a result
of
technology
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advancement social networks have been created that
allows
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people
to keep in touch with their dears and nears. Today
people
do not live
in
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a
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big planet of yesterday, they live in a small
village
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of today.
for instance
, today
bounderies
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boundaries
are meaningless which means that individuals can preserve their contact with their beloved
althogh
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although
they are far
more
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away from them.
Therefore
,
this
is a tool that would aim to conserve life-long
relationship
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.
Moreover
, it has become a novel method for folks to
broden
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broaden
their network of contacts with
people
who
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they may be
intrested
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interested
in them.
as
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a result,
people
do not have difficulty
to find
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people
with the
resmble
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resemble
concerns and interests.
for
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instance, It has become
trend
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that many folks find they soulmates from these networks and many
friendship
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have
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been originated from virtual contacts. notwithstanding, it is hard to underestimate the affirmative impacts of
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technology
thechnology
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technology
in
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new
relationship
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,
to sum up
,I reiterate that
development
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of technology have expanded
people
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relationship
,
also
it has created
modern
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way to get
acquianted
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acquainted
with persons
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • digital communication
  • instant messaging
  • social media platforms
  • virtual connections
  • long-distance relationships
  • cultural diversity
  • online interactions
  • cyberbullying
  • in-person interaction
  • emotional intimacy
  • cybersecurity
  • reliance on technology
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