In some countries, celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as a part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree?

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Celebrities
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are generally followed by
media
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people to obtain their photographs and videos to upload on
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, which is not liked by them.
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there is one set of society that supports
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sort of
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behaviour
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shown by
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the press
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, I wholeheartedly disregard
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ideology and believe that it is not appropriate to capture someone's pictures to make them on air. I will elaborate
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more
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in detail about it in
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paragraphs. The primary reason
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not supporting
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trend is that everyone has a right to maintain secrecy in life.
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, each individual has a private life irrespective of one's level of popularity in society, where one can live as an ordinary individual.
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, most of the time, news channels broadcast news about the clips shared by popular personalities on their social
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accounts, without taking their consent. Henceforth, anyone can mind, if someone publicizes their personal information, just because of its availability and accessibility on social
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platforms.
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, when
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reporters try to chase them everywhere, it disturbs their mental peace. After obtaining data about famous
person
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people
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from radio, television and other information sources,
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public usually try to follow them too, which is unjustifiable for
celebrities
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, as they may find
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it hard
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to spend some personal time with their families. To exemplify, when
celebrities
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take some time off from their work to go on vacation, news
media
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usually reaches there too, just to capture their personal movements to get some views, likes and comments on their channel.
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,
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kind of act may distress
celebrities
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more, as it can break their family. In conclusion,
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abovementioned
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substantiates that irresponsible
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behaviour
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of
media
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could affect
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celebrities
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celebrities'
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life and mental health adversely.
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, it is the duty of the government of any country to regulate
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kind of
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action
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.
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situation
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the situation
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could be worse in future.
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