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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactoryjob or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 argued that the best
way
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 to figure out a bad
situation
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 is accepting,
while
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 others thoughted that trying and improving is the better path to solving the bad
situation
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. And I fully agree with the
people
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 who believe that trying and improving is better than the former one.
Body paragraph 1
First of all, the
people
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 who thought that accepting is the best
way
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 in a bad
situation
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, believe taking risks to change the
situation
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 is a dangerous
way
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.
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, trying to adapt to the bad
situation
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 is more important to them.
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, if the student wants to change their major, the
effort
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 of the past to go to that school can turn out to be a waste. So for these
people
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, accepting is the better
way
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 in
this
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situation
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 and do not behave like the past is a waste of time.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, others believe that trying to do more
effort
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 to make a better future is the best
way
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 to solve the bad
situation
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. After doing an
effort
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, enlarging the possibility of success and higher a quality of future life is important for these
people
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.
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, I failed the English test but I did not give up and started at the first step to review my skills. After that, I
finally
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 got a great score on the exam. Staying at the failure point and accept it is not a good
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there are two different ways to figure out the bad
situation
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, just accepting because of the risk and doing an
effort
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 for a better future. In my opinion, searching for another
way
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 to figure out the bad
situation
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 and trying to become a better person is the best
way
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.

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