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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as children can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#society #people #schools #children #study #home #internet
Humans have always been dreaming of living in a luxurious apartment and
accordingly
, my dream is
also
 similar to that of other human beings. I want to be stable in a large and luxurious apartment as I do not want to experience any challenges with my living at home. My dream mansion would be a wonderful villa with spacious capacities and large corridors. There should be enough space for placing luxury furniture around the box, including the living room and kitchen.
Besides
 expanding space for furniture, the bedroom should decorate with blue colour to give a fresh atmosphere inside the room and locate on top of the apartment where I can view the city landscape in the afternoon.
In addition
, it could be an ideal place when it adds a big-sized bed and other furniture
such
 as a desk, a wardrobe and a high-tech television. I would like to build it far from Ho Chi Minh City where I can get out of the hustle and bustle for a tranquil environment. It is because the noise level from the metropolis can wake me every morning and traffic congestion in the city can cause air pollution which minimizes my fresh air and damages my mental health. If I choose to live in a rural area, it will be wonderful. Not only do I can have more space to build the building but I
also
 plant some trees which can produce shadows to prevent sunlight. I think these days individuals can mostly fix something
that is
 not very complicated on their hands
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